Friday Fictioneers is a challenge to write a 100 word story from a picture prompt hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.
I climbed the steps of the old bandstand. Years of exposure had turned the brilliant white wood to grey.
‘Some say you can still hear the band play when one of their descendants is about to die,’ I said. ‘But its all rubbish.’
Mal laughed, leaning over the edge of the pier. ‘The music is just there to scare the tourists,’ he said.
I stared at him as a large ocean swell rose up behind him.
‘What music?’
That was a chilling twist! Good one!
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Thank you Ansumani, glad you enjoyed it 🙂
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Wow! That was wonderful. It is absolutely amazing you were able to accomplish all that in less than 100 words!
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Thank you for reading Priceless Joy 🙂 I struggled a little with this one, but I got there in the end!
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You certainly did! Excellent!
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I definitely agree with PJ. I think you’ve accomplished so much with so little. Creepy plot line too!
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Thank you Mick! I love the challenge of writing flash fiction – thanks for dropping by to read 🙂
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Love it Cheryl, really great story with a fantastic ending 🙂
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Thank you! Absolutely loved yours too 🙂
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That was a brilliant story stold with so few words. Really loved it!
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Thanks for reading Edwina, really glad you liked it!
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I loved it! 🙂
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That was so freaky Cheryl! Love that last line!
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Thank you Creatopath! I seem to gravitate towards this kind of writing…not sure if its a good thing 🙂
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Oh yes, it’s a good thing!
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I hope so lol!
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Bravo, Cheryl! Great story, great twist.
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Thank you so much😃
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Ooohhh… “I see dead people”… or rather, “I hear music…” Bravo!
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Thank you Dale 😃
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Great, chilling story. After that last line I can imagine them slowly turning to looks at each other (if Mal hasn’t already fallen in the sea, that is!).
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Me too 🙂 I’m glad you liked it, thank you for dropping by for a read!
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I like the quiet tone of this – the drama is intensified by the understated dialogue.
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Thank you for reading Margaret. It helps to know people like what Im doing instead of throwing things at me 😃
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That put a smile on my face … well played!
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Thank you 😃
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Dear Cheryl,
Nicely composed and beautifully conducted. A perfect twist at the end and silence. I love it.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you for reading, and your lovely words. I’m glad you liked it!
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Dear Cheryl,
Well orchestrated piece with discordant twist at the end. I could just see the looks on their faces.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle 😃
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Oh … what an excellent twist. A story to send shivers down the spine, I think. Nicely done, Cheryl. 🙂
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Thank you so much for your lovely words 😀
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