It’s that time again, and here is my contribution to Friday Fictioneers. If you’d like to take part please see Rochelle’s page and she’ll show you what to do 🙂
Thanks for today’s photo prompt from Douglas M. MacIlroy I love this picture!
Selkie
The animal rose upward. Pointed teeth glistened in the late afternoon sun.
Tilly gasped and reached out.
‘Careful,’ said the old woman. ‘If you touch one, you’ll never be the same.’
Tilly frowned. ‘It’s only a statue.’
The woman smiled. ‘Legend says they’re the guardians of the water.’ She pointed to Loch Lomond, shining sapphire in the distance. ‘They swim during the night, returning to human form during the day.’
‘It’s just a story,’ said Tilly. She touched its metal head.
The woman got back to her feet and patted Tilly on the shoulder.
‘Yes it is,’ she said.
100 Words
Dear Cheryl,
You left me wondering if there will be repercussions from Tilly touching the statue. 😉 Nicely written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you Rochelle. I think there will be 😉
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Tilly is a great character. I’m sure there will be great adventure in her future. This is a great take on the prompt, and I also love the picture.
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Agree with Rochelle. I was half expecting Tilly to turn into some miniature monster of the deep. Good story.
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There’s always time 😉 Thank you for reading.
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Nice character work here, primarily through the dialogue – i get an impression of them both. I also get a sense that the Old lady knows more than she’s letting on…
🙂
KT
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She does indeed. Thank you for your lovely words, I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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great story!
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Thank you 🙂
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What’s going to happen next? Methinks the old woman enjoys swimming at night.
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She does indeed…and is quite partial to the odd tourist or two 😉
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Oh I would say that she’ll never be the same.. 🙂
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Probably a little more flippery 🙂 I think there’s a reason why that isn’t a word 😉
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Now I need to know what happenned next…. Nice one.
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Thank you ansumani 🙂 I’m thinking of turning this into a full short story.
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Tilley grows a tail or eats the old lady, right? I love the story and ending. So many options
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Thank you 🙂 Definitely the tail, maybe a light lunch too 😉
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Great story. I too was left with the impression that perhaps the old woman once touched the statue herself and knows the truth of the story. I think it would be great turned into a short story.
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Thank you for reading Irene, I would love to work on this idea more 🙂
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It’s got great bones if you wanted to explore it further. 🙂
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Oh no – there’s a definite threat between the lines here. Tilly’s in trouble. Great story.
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I don’t think she’ll be a non-believer for long 😉 Thank you for reading Margaret.
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I hope Tilly can swim. 🙂
Tracey
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Lol! If not she’s in for a rough ride 😉
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Wow. I can’t believe you did that in 100 words! That’s always my biggest issue…trying to keep the word count down. You are a master storyteller!
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Thank you for such lovely words A.P. you’ve just made my day!
To be honest my writing is always a little on the lean side, I always worry about not having enough and readers left feeling its too short 🙂
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Hah. The grass is always greener, huh? Here you are thinking you’re too short and here I sit thinking I’m too long. Funny. But truly, I really enjoyed your story!
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Maybe we should edit each others and then we’d reach a balance 😉
I’m so glad you liked it, thank you!
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I am totally up for that!
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great story and great ending… although I don’t believe that the ending will be all that great.
Randy
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Thank you Randy 🙂
I suppose it depends on whether Tilly likes fish 😉
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Selkie. Good direction, great piece.
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Thank you Dave 🙂
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That was a fun story. I think the old woman touched the statue once herself. Perhaps Tilly even released her from its spell?
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I never thought of that angle – I like that!. Thanks for reading Dawn 🙂
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That’s the great thing about these flash stories and the comments they evoke.
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Dear Cheryl, Great story and anticipation is waiting for Tilly tonight. She will be swimming from now on, I think. Good job! Nan
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Thank you Nan…I have a feeling she will be too. I’m glad you liked it 🙂
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I get a definite feeling that its not just a story and that Tilly has just invited trouble! A great story with two very clearly depicted characters. 🙂
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I’m glad they came across well, I always worry I’m a little too brief. That’s why I love the Friday Fictioneers challenge so much, it plays to my strength of lack of word count lol!
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I really like Tilly!
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Thank you Bob 🙂
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Spooky! I think it would make a great short story too. So many ways you could go. Like how you left the reader wondering what would happen at the end.
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Thanks Creatopath, I’m glad you liked it 🙂 I’m definitely going to give this one a go!
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Wow Cheryl ! Love this one, it may even be my favourite. I would love to see you expand on this, I want to know what happens to her ! 🙂
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Thank you 😊 I will send it to you when it’s done.
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Wonderful
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Thank you 🙂
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